HW 25- Story Comments and Analysis

To Sam J,

"What made her so cool was that she didnt change because of what people thouht of her." 'We didnt like change, so we kind of distanced ourselves from change. We just were ourselves. Maybe we didnt get what being cool meant, but then again, we just didnt really care." I totally agree with this quote you came up. Who even care if you are cool, at least you are still the same person inside. You came up with a pretty nice story of how a teenage girl grow up to worry about her looks and becoming cool, but it is still natural, but their personality is still the same. Good Job.

To Richard Y,

Your story makes me laugh, and thats why i have to leave you a comment. Your story is a little bit confusing and off topic but it is still funny to read about a man who doesnt give a shit about anything. Toward the end, you came up with a point about how he is asking himself question. He is very open minded,that when i got confused. But i like your story. good job

To Richie S

That was interesting. Your story is off the hook. SOme funny ass story you came up. I like how your story is based on friends betraying one another. But one thing you should had work on was to make the sex scence much better. I like how you close your story. Very thoughtful. Keep it up.

To Victor S(section 4)

Damn man your main character is not cool at all, he is a badass. But it was nice reading a funny story of how a kid tries to kill his teacher. You sort of have an idea of how your story is going. Your story is very different from a lot of other stories, you sure did put a lot of efforts into your story. Keep it up.

To Kiana C(Section 4)

Whats good beautiful? Your story is off the hook. Nice story you came up, which makes me leave you a comment. First of all, your introduction is very catchy and it sory of connects to my life. LOL. You want to be like the ghetto type so you get more attention. THen when you show off your coolness, you just talk slang. Really cool story. Good job.

I read more than 5 stories and everyone else is good. I notice that people set coolness as an example as being the ghetto type or just want to stand out, getting attention. Thats how kids act around these days. Probably trying to fit into the world. I didnt make up my own story, it is true. I went through that kind of harassing back when i was in middle school. People influence you to be like one another. I think cool is just a way to get around. Like you want people to know about you. That how coolness stand out for me.